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Originally posted by RoM
This is something I wrote in Hebrew and decided to translate to english, I hope i did it well, I tried to make it as good, its written about people who died in wars and terror attacks, its the memorial day for soldiers and terror victims here in Israel and I wrote the song in todays spirit.... |
That's a very good piece of text. Nice work.
I'm not sure if you're planning to do anything with this English version apart from posting it here, but perhaps you're interested in having the spelling errors removed, to make it even better. I'll light them in red.
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Originally posted by RoM
The Heros of existence and peace,
We will remember you all.
The Heart aches, the soul bleeds,
Why out of all-you?
A day will come and the quiet will prevail
And your sacrifice and courage we'll recall.
The heart bleeds, the eyes weep.
The memory stays the soul cries.
The fire of yearning is burning.
In the victory day it's you we'll remember
Every heart
Every soul
Every hero... |
Usually, when something is written in a style like this, the periods at the end of each sentence aren't used.
For the rest, you did a great job.
